Stephen King’s dislike of adverbs is well-known, but are writers now ignoring his advice?
“I believe the road to hell is paved with adverbs, and I will shout it from the rooftops. To put it another way, they’re like dandelions. If you have one in your lawn, it looks pretty and unique.
If you fail to root it out, however, you find five the next day… fifty the day after that… and then, my brothers and sisters, your lawn is totally, completely, and profligately covered with dandelions.
By then you see them for the weeds they really are, but by then it’s — GASP!! — too late.” Stephen King
I often take a look at the bestselling titles on Amazon and have a quick preview read of the top 100 books. Call it market research.
While this habit of mine is often about discovering what genres are popular, or how a book hooks a reader in the first chapter, I have noticed in recent times that adverbs are being used far more often.
Yesterday, I checked the top five ebooks on Kindle and three of the titles used adverbs with reporting verbs with almost every line of dialogue.
For me, the three books were annoying and painful to read, but what do I know about popular writing and what readers want to read today?
Not to point a finger, but as the three titles were romance, I wonder if the return of the dreaded adverb is intentional and is becoming a writing tool that helps speed up a story.
Or, are the writers oblivious to the old writing adage that ly adverbs are not your best friend.
With so many new writers using self-publishing now, perhaps they are unaware of the fact that the road to hell is paved with adverbs. Or should we now say, was paved?
What did Stephen King say about adverbs?
To remind writers of his advice, here is a short extract from his book, Stephen King On Writing – A Memoir of the Craft, which is for many writers the ultimate guide to good writing.
I insist that you use the adverb in dialogue attribution only in the rarest and most special of occasions … and not even then, if you can avoid it. Just to make sure we all know what we’re talking about, examine these three sentences:
“Put it down!” she shouted.
“Give it back,” he pleaded, “it’s mine.”
“Don’t be such a fool, Jekyll,” Utterson said.
In these sentences, shouted, pleaded, and said are verbs of dialogue attribution. Now look at these dubious revisions:
“Put it down!” she shouted menacingly.
“Give it back,” he pleaded abjectly, “it’s mine.”
“Don’t be such a fool, Jekyll,” Utterson said contemptuously.
The three latter sentences are all weaker than the three former ones, and most readers will see why immediately.
Some writers try to evade the no-adverb rule by shooting the attribution verb full of steroids. The result is familiar to any reader of pulp fiction or paperback originals:”
“Put the gun down, Utterson!” Jekyll grated.
“Never stop kissing me!” Shayna gasped.
“You damned tease!” Bill jerked out.
The best form of dialogue attribution is said, as in he said, she said, Bill said, Monica said.
I have always been a firm believer in this last line of advice from King because it makes a writer work at showing and not telling.
But, what would I know?
Not one of my books is in the top ten anywhere. But for some, adverbs are now in, and the road to hell is not paved with them anymore.
Instead, the road to the bestseller list may well be literally, currently and incessantly dotted with damned ly adverbs.
“Oh no!” I moan, begrudgingly.
So, what’s an adverb?
It is a part of speech. Adverbs modify verbs, adjectives or another adverb.
The most recognisable is formed by adding ly to words such as sadly, modestly, greedily, angrily, happily or terribly. These are often adverbs of manner and can be used to modify adjectives and other adverbs.
Examples of time include yesterday, tomorrow, now, then, late and early.
They are also used for frequency like sometimes, never, rarely or often.
They can also be used as adverbial phrases, or an adverb phrase like very carefully, quite easily, surprisingly well or luckily for us.
Sentence adverbs modify a whole sentence by setting the sentiment in the first word. Common words are clearly, obviously, curiously or sadly. They are always followed by a comma.
Using an adverb before an adjective modifies the adjective. Truly funny, incredibly big, carefully manicured and fairly solid are good examples.
But King was mainly referring to adverbs that are used in dialogue in fiction to modify common reporting verbs such as said, told and asked.
His advice was to avoid extravagant attribution or reporting verbs, and moreover, never modify them with an adverb. So, he grated angrily, or he remarked courteously are out according to King’s advice.
I have to agree – wholeheartedly. Use adverbs, sparingly!
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