How To Send Your Readers To Sleep With Poor Writing

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Don't Send Your Readers To Sleep

Don’t write and publish a book that will send your readers off to sleep

When I selected a novel to read recently, it was by chance.

I’m not sure when I bought it and loaded it onto my Kindle, but it was unread, so I began reading it.

Sadly, though, after a great start, the book slowly sent me to sleep.

The first chapter was quite well-written with a tempting plot setting, and this was what probably hooked me into buying this book after reading the preview.

I was impressed that the book had obviously been thoroughly, if not meticulously proofread. For the first twenty pages or so, I thought it was going to be a good example of a well-written self-published novel.

Unfortunately, though, after these first few well-written pages, the wheels fell off and I only continued reading because I was making mental notes of the facets of the book that were spoiling what could have been a terrific read.

Here are a few of the problems I encountered.


Awful formatting

The text was in one huge block with no clear or regular paragraphing.

Either a line space between paragraphs or first line indent would have been the normal choices to help a reader navigate the text.

Without either, it made it very difficult to read and killed any flow the story may have had.


All tell

All good writers know about ‘Show and Tell‘ and that while a balance of the two is needed in fiction writing, all narrator-driven ‘tell‘ is a sure fire way to send a reader to sleep.

If only the characters had been allowed to ‘show‘ their story.

I won’t harp on this point, but suffice to say that it is an all too common mistake I see – writers falling into the trap of only telling their story from their point of view, and not the characters telling theirs.

This book was, unfortunately, one of those with practically all author tell and no character show.


Clichéd and weak dialogue

Worse than just using clichés and hackneyed phrases, the very limited dialogue in this book hardly ever extended beyond five or six words and each line of the dialogue carried a reporting verb, and an all too often, an unnecessary adverb.

It was symptomatic of a lack of understanding in allowing characters to develop and ‘showing‘ the story to the reader.

Without well-crafted dialogue, it was impossible to get to know the characters.

The best way I have found to test dialogue is to read it out loud.

Does it sound natural and logical?

If not, re-write it, so it does.


Unreal fiction

While fiction is fiction, it does really need to make sense.

Non-sensical reactions by characters, illogical outcomes to scenarios and just plain silliness all weaken a good plot.

There were some very silly passages in this book that should have been edited out.


A flat ending

There is nothing more disappointing than reading a novel and discovering that it has a rushed ending.

The end of a book should be when the reader thinks ‘wow‘, not, ‘damn‘.

I was left with the impression that the author hadn’t planned or outlined this story at all. It seemed that the ending was driven by the word count and not the story. ‘And they all lived happily ever after?’

These are just a few of the problems I encountered with this book, but my main purpose in highlighting them is not to criticise the book or the author.

Therefore I won’t mention either by name. My thoughts on this book are only to offer some clues on how to improve and grow as a writer.

Self-publishing is a tough business, and with so many great, good, bad and terrible books available now, the only way to stand out from the crowd is to write extremely well.

Avoiding the errors I have highlighted here may just help you do that and avoid sending your readers to sleep.


More reading: Are There Any Secrets Or Tricks To Good Story Writing?


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Derek Haines

Derek Haines is an Australian author, living in Switzerland.

One thought on “How To Send Your Readers To Sleep With Poor Writing

  • November 6, 2018 at 12:36 am

    I would love to think that my books are typed pretty well. I’m no Stephen king but I hope that it’s at least enjoyable for the reader to where they would recommend it to others.


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